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MUSIC PLAYLIST CHAPTER 14: INSIDE THE YEARLING DEN

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CHAPTER 14 INSIDE THE YEARLING DEN

Completed chapter 14. The chapter is called Inside the yearling cave.

This Chapter was pretty heavy and intense. A chapter filled with a lot of reflective and judgmental moments for the characters and a lot of newfound reality moments for the characters. So, the music I chose for this chapter was kind of in-between being heavy and reflective but also action pact because there is another chase scene.  

So here is my playlist for this chapter 14:

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YOU’RE NOT MORTAL

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You’re Not Mortal is the 4th scene in the 14th chapter of the 2nd draft of the work in progress novel During the Blue Hour.  I finally completed not only this scene but the whole of chapter 14.  Let me tell you I was dawdling through this scene not because it was boring but because I had to rewrite most of it.   The new version of this chapter came to 8928 words. The you’re not mortal scene came to 3554 words total.  The longest word counts out of all the scenes and chapters so far in the 2nd draft.

SCENE SYNOPSIS: Sirena is finally told by Cristen that she is not mortal, but in fact a caninruh  and that she must stay with the pack in order to protect her, but her reaction is more than what is expected   from Cristen and Sirena runs off in disbelief back to her mortal community.

In this scene it is in the 1st love interest  pov ; Cristen and he has to convince Sirena that she is one of them.  I originally wrote the scene in 2012 within the first draft but it wasn’t this long.   It’s pretty much the same but the interactions and locations are somewhat different. 

In this draft Adrian shows back up to the group and in front of Sirena in the form of the large werewolf and ordinarily Sirena would be afraid, but she can tell the difference between Adrian and any other beast because of his apparent kindness. 

But like I said Cristen is the main POV   so his perception is warped in this scene but not because he is an empath, and he can sense the energies between both Sirena and Adrian.  So, within this scene there is a lot of tension because he is the alpha of the yearling werewolf pack and sees Adrian as trying to undermine him.  In reality Adrian has fallen for Sirena   and they are talking telepathically.  Cristen doesn’t like that. 

My greatest pitfall for this chapter is trying to keep the tension between the triangles.   In the other chapters Sirena’s attitude is not one of being afraid but curious, even though she uses the excuse she is going to find her friend it is also because she is curious about the teenage wolves that saved her from the bear.  However, she is still running away from them because she is in disbelief over the fact Cristen has told her she is actually a werewolf like the rest of them.  

Moreover, she runs away because she has to face this truth that is her   most hidden and dreadful fear in which she had tried to keep buried and locked within her dreams. 

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NAMING NAMES IS SO ON THE NOSE?  CHARACTER DIALOGUE

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What do you think about how characters introduce themselves to other characters that don’t know their name?  Is it on the nose?

So, I am working on this scene in chapter 14 where a terrified Sirena (my main character) has just seen the werewolf pack    in their nonhuman form, and she is scared shitless   by their appearance being their red eyes.   So, she doesn’t   say anything to them, but she is freaking out.  So, her   love interest Cristen, alpha of the pack, in his point of view   introduces himself and the rest of the pack excluding Adrian (he isn’t there) by name to get her to calm down.  

 So, my question is:

Is naming names within a scene like this so on the nose?

Let’s explore.  Well, if you think about it, do we use each other name in daily conversation when we are talking? No.  Because   that would lead   to boring and stilted   conversation, right?

But what about when we first meet someone? 

Someone usually says, ” What’s your name?”  or ” Who are You?”

And   we usually say, ” my name is so and so,” right?  And that’s okay because we have never met that person.

But what about when it’s in fiction?   Can we name names? 

Answer is It depends. 

 Dialogue is the trickiest component in writing a fiction novel. Things can easily get bogged down and messed up making the dialogue seem stilted and unreal.   But when writing dialogue, we want to make it as real as we can.

So naming names in fiction is only really used for emphasis or trying to get a character’s attention.  But must be careful not to overuse it.

In my case   I only use   this one   time in my novel for two reasons   really:

  • Because my main character Sirena has  never  met  the pack
  • And second because  she is freaking out and Cristen  trying to  get her  to calm down  .  

So, I’m going to see where this naming names scene takes me, and I’ll let you know how  it goes . 

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HOW SPARKS FLY IN THIS LOVE TRIANGLE…

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(Original post AND THE LOVE TRIANGLE BEGINS …)

Sparks  fly in  this love  triangle I  got  going on my  work in progress novel but how?

The love triangle   in  my work in progress  novel is  just a  subplot  in this first novel actually  and begins  on the 12th  chapter of my 2nd draft.

The two love  interest Adrian and Cristen    won’t actually realize  they have  feeling for Sirena  until  after  they find out  she is  a werewolf. Based  on how they are  raised  they  don’t  really have any interest   in romancing  and mating  with a human girl and I don’t explore that  until  maybe my 3rd  book  in which case Eli will be the human that a new werewolf  character named Amarantha  falls  in love with him.

But  anyways there will be sparks between them  all that they will ignore up until chapter 12.  Not only  because  they think   she is human but because they also have their  own goals .  This  chapter 14 is where  they  finally  establish  she is defiantly  a  werewolf  and  boy do the  emotions  and sparks fly.  All kinds of jealousy and animosity  all over the place.

Sirena has just found out she is a werewolf from love interest Cristen and the rest of   his pack.  She is in this confusion scared state where she doesn’t believe any of what has just been told to her even though she already has been through a lot within the previous chapters.   She literally has been almost killed twice. The first time by a religious wolf hunter and almost kidnapped by the wolf council. 

But when she sees  Adrian  she softens a bit because  Adrian  saved her  from  getting mauled   by a  dog  in previous  chapters. But  just a bit because he is in   his werewolf form  with  red  eyes and  everything is  just  weird  to Sirena.   She   doesn’t  and can’t believe what is before  her.  But  that sense  of familiarity   from him  makes her  draw closer  to him  as  though she is a  magnetic  .

Cristen wants help  from the earth diver to  get off the mountain but in order to do that he has to  help Sirena.   

Adrian wants to become the alpha and so  he  thinks  he can use  his new found knowledge  about Sirena to  do that.

This love triangle between the three will  consist of a lot of jealously  , betrayals and secrets .

The main Character Sirena  will  be interested in both of them and she will have a reason to be interested in both of them.  They will be her  first ever love  interest. 

 She is interested  in Adrian  because  he seems to understand her in a way. They  seem to get along  and she likes Adrian  because he never seems to be afraid to tell her the  truth  of things no matter how harshly  he delivers  it.  And she respects him for that.   And also he ends  up saving her most of the time. 

With her falling for Cristen he    is reasonable, compassionate, and kind to her  and seems to understand  her differently  because he can easily read  her emotions and  see through  her insecurities  because   of his powers and abilities  and  he connects her  with his emotions and  calm her  emerging  werewolf  rage.  And  she  is able to do the same , calming him of his  werewolf rage  since his powers are not fully developed as  well.

I  don’t have Sirena really going back and forth  over them like a drag out decision . Time is of the essence and she   really has no time to  play  teenage  love games with the two werewolf boys .  Because she is about to become a  werewolf  herself dammit.

I  only put in a little section within the novel where  both Adrian and Cristen will  give her an ultimatum   to choose between them  but  she is like wait hold  the phone  .  She   is new  to the  whole boyfriend   experience and feelings  thing  especially  with them both being werewolves  where they date differently.  They don’t date  . They mate  and become pair bonds. (pair bonds is a real thing  in the real world  in wolf society. Check this article out about ( pair bonds)But in my novel they can’t officially mate until they get  to the  werewolf community anyway.   Another reason why they are rushing her to make a choice is because  they have never seen another  werewolf girl besides  Imani. And Imani  is Adrian’s sister who is  the future  pair bond to  Bastian.  Cristan  always  also saw Imani as a  sister  so yeah . Sirena  is basically the only werewolf  girl  right now they can choose from. 

She basically  tells them they are both  crazy and she is not going to mate with them .

This particular scene  in my first draft that will soon be in my 2nd draft  doesn’t  mean Sirena doesn’t  choose  one of them  because she does .   I don’t want to really tell  you who but  there  is a kissing  scene between Sirena and one of the  two boys.   And the other  boy    is  greatly devasted by Sirena’s  choice.

This choice  that Sirena makes will bring a lot of conflict  between both Adrian  and Cristen   even though they  already hate  each other  over the whole  alpha   situation( I talk about that  type of rivalry  in a different post)  Her  decision  doesn’t  make anything better   in the story  even other characters hate her for  what she decides.   Let  me just  give you a little (spoiler) her decision   comes to a tragic  accumulation .  She is never  selfish  about  her decision and she doesn’t  string them along but  it’s  just that the reveal  of    secrets  and lies  get in the way and makes her choice  worse  for everybody  at  the end .

This   love triangle  subplot   is  basically  scattered   mostly toward  the middle and end of my novel.  I can’t say  that  the three character actually fall  in love  perse .   All three of these characters  just have these  new found feelings . They are all teenagers in this first novel  .   And they don’t  know what their  feelings are  yet.  

The  only  two characters  I  can say that   know exactly   what their feeling are  with each other are  Bastian and Imani but their true love will  be tested  in my later  books  and  I  don’t  know  where those particular  love triangle  storylines will go yet .  

Did I  need a love triangle in this  first novel?  No . I mean I could  have done without  one.  I didn’t have one in my pre-draft   screenplay version . But   I just thought  it would be fun to add more conflict to the  story.   I kind of  like  reading love triangles in other novels and thought I’d give  it a try writing  about one  myself.  

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(NEW)What Does it Mean to Really Write What You Know?

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Have you ever heard that saying write what you know? Well of course you have. Every person that has ever thought or dreamed about becoming a writer has heard it once or twice. A teacher or professor has said this phrase as you turned in your paper. Write what you know. But that lingering question is stuck in your mind. The one that asks, how do you write what you know if it has never been taught or experienced?

The one problem that I always had with this phrase: write what you know, was that I never really got a crash course on how to do it or where to start. It is as though if you want to be a writer, the writer is automatically supposed to know how to do it.

I always asked myself these questions in my mind what do I know about that is worthy enough of telling a story? What have I experienced? But then I tell myself, well, I am trying to write fiction not a non-fictional   account of something that I did or experienced. Not an autobiography.

Wouldn’t the phrase write what you know just completely fall on death ears then if that was the case. Yup   it would. Most defiantly.

 For example, I write in the fantasy genre. Stories about werewolves and all the things that go bump in the night. But do I know anything about what a werewolf really is? Have I seen a werewolf in real life? Heck no. But I wish I did. Because that would be so cool. No. It really would, and   wouldn’t it be some experience to write about? Of course, it would.

But how do you write about something that you haven’t experienced? Something that is not real? Something that doesn’t exist? Something you completely know nothing about?

Well, it is hard to answer for most. But over the years I have come to the conclusion, in my opinion that the phrase, ‘write what you know,’ doesn’t actually means write what you know.  And since I don’t like to write autobiographies, I take my cue from the great writers of the past.

Bram Stoker, Mary Shelly, J. R. R Tolkien, C. S Lewis, H. G. Wells. Edgar Allen Poe to name a few. Yeah, yeah, I know I named only writers from the last hundred years or so and there are more writers of course. But these are my favorite few.

And they all had something in common. They didn’t all write what they knew. All of their stories were all fictional. Made up. Fantasy, sci-fi, and horror. Unless all of their stories was an account of their real life. Which I honestly don’t think there was an actual invasion or time travel expedition, an encounter with a vampiric   count Dracula that roamed the Carpathian landscape, or a parallel, time warped, black hole journey into Middle Earth or Narnia. (WELL UNLESS  THERE  REALLY  WAS? AND THERE IS SOMETHING THEY AREN’T TELLING US. WE WOULD NEVER REALLY KNOW, NOW, WOULD WE?) 

Well, how did they write what they knew then? Well, the answer to that is plain old research and simple yet complex imaginations.

And so that’s what I think the phrase ‘write what you know,’ really means, not just experiences of your own life.

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(NEW) SHORT STORY ANTHOLOGY SERIES COMING SOON 2022 & BEYOND …

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While I’m  writing my work in progress novel  During the Blue Hour . I’m also working on a short story  series  for the  same novel series. There  will be  different stories that will  involve  characters from the universe  that I  mention  in the upcoming novels.  I had planned  to do this  years ago . I  just didn’t  really have the time to sit down and do it. But now I  will be concentrating on that and my novel series .

The short  story series  consist  of right now  about  11  short  stories give or take. There might be more  or changes to this list. 

ANTHOLOGIES OF THE HOUR SERIES

  • Story 1: The First  Kraldire
  • Story 2:  In the Hour of Humanity
  • Story 3:  Iron clad:  The story of Annette and Cole 
  • Story 4: TheViātors of the Caelum
  • Story 5: A Tale of Two Brothers
  • Story 6: The Apennine  pack
  • Story 7:  Refuge :  The story of the Wolf Warrior
  • Story 8:  Alpha
  • Story 9: The Eternals : The struggle between good and evil
  • Story 10: Pair Bond
  • Story 11: Red Envy

My plan is to turn these  short stories into some sort of Chronicles about the history for my  main character . In my first  work in progress  novel for the  series my main character doesn’t know  anything about the world of these  werewolves. So  she will read a  history  eventually.  These histories will be  mentioned  in the second novel.   Hopefully I will start that one next year.   

These are some to look forward to now . I will try to blog them individually . The  First Kraldire short story  and an excerpt of IN THE HOUR OF HUMANITY: The Story of Zios is already up . So if you  would like to read that  . You can go  ahead and read it now . There will be changes  to that stories though.  I ‘m not sure I will  upload  those changes .  I will be submitting them to literary  magazines  or self-publishing them all together.  So  stay tune  . Keep  an  eye out for them .  And please  when  you read the short stories please leave your comments about the stories in order to improve  them if needed.   

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THIS MAGICAL WORLD OF WONDER: THE PROLOGUE THAT INVOLVES A SNOW GLOBE, MUSIC BOX & WEREWOLF

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(this post was originally published on june 22, 2021 as THIS MAGICAL WORLD OF WONDER IS THE PROLOGUE THAT ALMOST WASN’T )

 So, like you, I ‘ve heard that prologues are not thought upon lightly. Because they usually are skipped, sometimes boring or are simply not necessary. 

Last year I recorded a prologue podcast episode about the origins of prologues.  I liked researching for that episode.  I will be recording another podcast about prologues sometime in the future.  

But right now, I want to talk about the prologue in my novel that almost wasn’t. What do you mean almost wasn’t?

Well, my current prologue. 

I had this same prologue in my first draft.  I chose to take it out for my 2nd draft because when I was back in college some years ago, an English professor read the draft and well he ripped the prologue out   because he said he simply did not read prologues. 

I was kind of devastated because I worked really hard on it, and it has everything to do with the rest of the story. 

My prologue is called The Magical World of Wonder and is centered on my main character’s best friend Gabby and her family. It’s very magical indeed. Not only does the prologue involve a snow globe, a music box and a werewolf but it plays with and triggers pretty heavy and intense secrets that are buried within the town and also along with Gabby’s family secrets.  But It’s one of those prologues where there is a character that doesn’t appear anymore throughout the novel again.  (Spoiler alert).

It’s hard to explain but it’s like a rewind fast forward scene. That can’t really be placed anywhere in the novel itself because the main character doesn’t see it or experience it.  But it will bring the story kind of full circle by the end of the novel.  And the character Gabby in the prologue is constantly mentioned throughout the novel by the main character and other characters. And what happens to Gabby in the prologue will come back to have heavy consequences on some of the characters within the main story. Especially Gabby’s family who are going to end up paying a heavy price for their deep and dark secrets.

So, I decided to put the prologue back in my novel.  Even if readers skip over it, the readers will probably find themselves going back to it in the middle of the novel. 

EXTRA NOTE: I will be posting the full prologue chapter on the blog within the next week or so but until then check out the visual prologue novel excerpt MAGICAL WORLD OF WONDER DELETED SCENE PROLOGUE – A DTBH WIP NOVEL(TEASER).

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THE  GENRE OF WEREWOLVES:  HORROR OR  FANTASY ?

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If you are like me and ever wondered about the werewolf genre within fiction and whether it was classified as horror or fantasy you want to read this post now because this is the post for you.

First before finding out what genre werewolves are classified under  let’s look at the difference of what the fantasy genre and horror genre in fiction is defined as.

Fantasy Genre:

The  fantasy  genre within novel writing and  literature  features  both magic and supernatural  elements that  evolve  around  made  up and imaginary  worlds , timelines and creatures .   It  usually has  at least  8  sub categories

  • High or epic fantasy.
  • Low fantasy.
  • Sword and sorcery.
  • Dark fantasy.
  • Fables.
  • Fairy tales.
  • Superhero fiction.

Horror Genre

Horror genre is focused more on mood.  In order to work it has to create an unsettling atmosphere and give its intended reader a sense of fear. Even though it may have fantastical elements within   its genre, the setting is usually entirely realistic. 

So I found  an article called 144 Genres and Subgenres for Fiction Writing by Tonya Thompson  and in the article  werewolves  are classified under monsters which is a subgenre  of  Horror.

But did you know there was another sub-genre that is considered in the realm of the fantasy genre?

It is called the paranormal genre or speculative fiction and this   genre is a subgenre of fantasy.  The paranormal genre consists of   all of the   monsters   that go bump in the night which includes werewolves.

Whereas wikipedia  has  defined the werewolf genre and classified  it   as being  a  genre  that  can be categorized in  both  horror and fantasy      

Just by looking at  these  two definitions  of  where  the werewolf genre  is  categorized  under we  can assume that  the werewolf genre  is  used  both in  fantasy and   horror   and can be used  in an  exceptional and  varied storylines and plots because of the ancients  roots the werewolf folklores stem from with its various re interpretations   of the genre. 

Thus  a   writer  can draw  from  previous  folklores  and myths of werewolves  in order  to create   a fantastical and horrific  tale.

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VALENTINE’S DAY: ARE MY CHARACTERS AFFECTED BY THE LOVE AT FIRST SIGHT BUG OR CUPIDS ARROW?

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(this is a repost from july 2021)

I just wrote a  recent post about  the love at first sight trope and  over the weekend   I wrote  about my  characters  in my work in progress  novel being  in a love triangle and how it will begin once I start chapter 12 .  Does  them  being  in a long triangle mean they are  affected by the love at first sight  bug?  Or  Cupid’s arrow? As I explained in my recent post.

Well let me delve into it and analysis my  own characters.

 Okay   so when  my Main character  Sirena   first comes  upon  Cristen , who  I like to call the  first  love interest because they interact first.   Both Sirena and Cristen get this funny   kind of tingly  butterfly  feelings  when he stops her from falling  (a  twilight  moment  , but not  really) They also feel like  they have met  each other before (spoiler ) they have .  (you’ll find out about that later) .

However  Sirena  simply thinks  this upon seeing him in chapter 5

Sirena’s  heart  raced and she  panicked.  That boy. That boy  was the same boy  at the  river  stream who  held her  in  his arms and  then  disappeared.  What  was he doing here?  Where  did he  come from?  The  town did not  receive  new  residents  often. Did he  come from Stella  City? An  Actor?  Dancer? Maybe? No.  She would  have heard of him.  Maybe he was a solider  or  spider agent  come to take  her away  to become a  gatherer because  of her  outburst  at the  river? No . He  would’ve  arrested  her  if  that was  the case.  Was  he  a new student  from Umbra  Valley City? If he was a new  student and  not  a Spider Agent or Dancer where  could she have  seen him  from before?  She knew  him from somewhere  other than at the river.

He had  a small leaf looking  scar on the  side  of his prominent  cheek bone  that appeared  to be imprinted  or burned  into his golden skin that made him appear  older than seventeen or eighteen. But  it could’ve  been a  birthmark. Stubble on  his face  as though  he was growing a beard. Neat. He had muscles. He was fit. He  worked  out.  He probably was a runner? Yeah he defiantly  was a runner . He had  these sort of deep set amber  brown eyes  that were kind of  different as though the  iris  of  his eyes changed  colors.  A spec  of red maybe?

 It was strange. He  wasn’t fine or attractive. He wasn’t even her  type at all.  But his allure was  strong.  Sirena  ogled and awed  toward the boy like all the rest of the girls in her class.  She drew  in a breath  but shook her head  unclear  to why she reacted that way.

Note that   I write  that she thought him  not fine  or  attractive.  However  she is drawn to him like  all the  other girls. Well  in   my work in progress  I  kind of use  that  mortals are attracted  (without knowing)   to werewolves  who are in their  human form . So she  is simply   confused   and curious  but I  wouldn’t   say its  love at first sight.  

I  also have  Cristen  reaction  in chapter 6

When the  mortal girl Sirena almost fainted he threw himself to help her. He  tried to  ignore  her  but  her despair  was different than the rest of the mortals.  She wanted answers to her  friend’s disappearance.   And somehow he didn’t  crave for her heart in his mind. She was like a pacifier. She subdued the cravings and the rage.  There was no green-eyed abnormality  to  think  of. Only the fluttering butterflies swarming  each and every way through  her  thoughts. Beyond the butterflies  there  was this movements of  a white sun; circles, spirals and rays that shown through her downtrodden yellow  blue spirit . Glimmers of  her sitting in a room full of people  gawking  at her as though  deciding her fate…glimmers  of her laughing with her friends- a girl and a boy…glimmers of a man laughing with joy… glimmers of a girl dancing  in  snow… glimmers of  a women brushing her hair… glimmers  of her and another  girl laughing and swatting each other with a soft feather material in a brightly colored room…glimmers of her dancing.. her dancing was- was like ice   droplets falling.    Those glimmers  of her life  all  spun  together ,  uneven , disorganized , collapsing. He reached out for them and tried  to settle  the  moments of her life, to keep them still. To go deeper into-but he couldn’t  reach  the  white sun  even if  he tried. How could he make it stop?

So in this passage I try to explore  that  he  is able to see  who  she truly  is and how she  feels .   Which he wants  to  take away her sadness  and make her happy.  Because  she is somehow the only  one to pacify  his  cravings  from the mortal hearts in the room  and also  his rage .   But he can’t  seem  to take  away her despair (he doesn’t know  how.  He hasn’t  fully mastered  his abilities yet.  And  another  spoiler-  he  won’t especially  when  it comes to dealing with Sirena)  . And  he doesn’t  understand why  he is  having these  feelings about her.  

So it’s  not  a  love at first sight  thing for Cristen  it’s just  that he is also questioning their  connection with one another . And he also wants to figure out  why  she can  settle  his rage. But   these  feelings  don’t  overtake his mind   dispelling his   main goal which  is to get off the  mountain.   And plus  he thinks she’s mortal so .  He’s  not going there  with that.

Let’s see  if it was love at first sight  with Adrian and Sirena

The  first time  Adrian meets Sirena  in chapter  7

 He leaned back and abruptly glanced down at her in his arms. He forgot he was even holding her. He gasped . He had never seen a mortal close up before, nevertheless another girl before besides own his sister. The girl was beautiful. He gazed down at her and grazed his fingers lightly against her cheek. wait, what was going on? he sniffed her. Why could he hold her and  not transform into his Canine?  He didn’t know why but he did know he couldn’t just leave her there …

 He placed the girl next to a tree . He glanced down at her,  pushed her hair gently out of her face and smirked ….

Glanced at the girl one more time and sped toward the pack…

With Adrian  I can’t say it is love at first sight because  he has   never  seen  another girl before .  Mortal or Werewolf , besides   his own sister. His first  reaction of her  is  that  she is beautiful  .  But he is just curious and  nothing  more  .   Once again they   think  Sirena  is human . 

Here is a reaction to Sirena meeting  Adrian for the first time in chapter 11

Adrian just looked at her as she cringed touching her head. Finally she turned looking up at him. No, more like through him, and started to stand up.  She didn’t say anything. She just scrutinized him but not like the other mortals did….

For Sirena  it’s  definitely  not love  at first sight  when meeting  Adrian and this is not even  in her  POV but Adrian’s POV.  But  he describes  her as scrutinizing  him not in the way others  did.  You going to come to find out that she  does it not out of  oh I’m in love  with you but  out of  recognition that  she has seen him before but in  wolf  form.   Strange I know,  but it will be more  clear  once  my novel is finished and you  can actually read it.

With  these passages  they clearly   show  that there  is no love at first sight  anywhere  with my characters. However  when the two  werewolf boy will realize  that she  is a  werewolf herself  they will  get  some sort  of  well not  love at first sight but  more  attraction at first site  .   And I’m  also going to mention that  my novel’s  story  takes place in a week’s  time as  by the end of the book it  is  the main character’s  birthday.  And  she does end  up kissing  one of the werewolf boys but that still   doesn’t  account for love at first  sight.

So to answer my own  questions based on my  own analysis of my  characters  I would say no  they haven’t  caught  the love at first sight bug and I  don’t use the trope in my novel . Well… at least not yet….

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VALENTINE’S DAY: IS THE LOVE AT FIRST SIGHT TROPE IN FICTION CURSED?

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(This is a repost from July 2021)

What is it about the love at first  sight  trope  that drives people mad ? Why is it sworn  off by most novelist? The last time it was  used  by  a novelist  was  2008 in Suzanne Collins , Hungers  Games . The last time it was used in a film  was  2018’s  Hotel Transylvania 3: A Monster Vacation. And  in  2017 for the TV Show  Billions. And before  2008  when Suzanne Collins  used   the trope  , it wasn’t used  since 1977  in the book The Silmarillion by  J R.R. Tolkien . So yeah  fiction novelist simply do not use  it anymore that much .

I ask again  what is it about the love at first sight trope  that all  novelist swear against?  Is  this trope  simply  cursed ?

 But first lets  answer this question what  is love at first sight as used  in fiction?

Love at first sight is a  common  convention  and trope  within  literature  where a person   feels immediately  attracted  to  another upon  meeting them for the  first  time.   The    term love at first  sight  originated from Greek mythology   meaning    madness  from   the gods  and  if you had it,    it was a clear   sign  that you  were affected  by Cupid ‘s   arrow .  And if you were pierced  by the love dart   you would   immediately  be overwhelmed  with desire and love sickness  and become  spellbound and charmed  by the intended.

Examples  of how  this  trope  has been used is in:

  • Romeo and  Juliet 
  • Aladdin 
  • Frozen

Even  though these  examples  used the trope  well  some believe  that the trope  is difficult to write  and  is unable  to  be  believable in a story.  For a love at first sight storyline   to actually   work  there  needs  to be  a Plausible connection between the characters .  But others   believe  the trope as fantasy  so anything goes  and so it’s easy for them to write. Moreover love  at first sight simply does not  and cannot exist  but attraction  and lust  at first  sight  can.   

And that is easily assessed  to what people are really writing.   But   it easily   becomes  cliché  if the  writer  is not careful .  And so that’s  what happens and that’s  why the writer  fails  at writing this type of story.

The characters  need to be attracted to each other and have chemistry   enough that   readers  will care about the romance at  hand. But  the characters  themselves  also have to be interesting on their own  reserves . If not the  this  love  at first sight  storyline  can fall  apart before it even gets started . Lastly in order for a full fledge plausible  love at first sight story  it  can  help   if you develop  the romance over time and show  it subtly  throughout the novel. 

Okay so my answer to the earlier  question  is  its not cursed  it   just  merely  overused and  wrongly   executed .  There is no reason a writer cannot  use it and turn the trope’s  clichéness  around  like  for  instance  Frozen did.   They parodied the crap out of  the trope  and you can’t  say  you didn’t  have a couple of laughs  about  it. I sure  did.  

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